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Writer's Room
« on: October 07, 2015, 11:03:49 AM »
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V4vJZhsEQpM

But seriously. How's it going folks? I've been following this project for a few years now, checking in when possible to see new developments. I was delighted to find Crazy and Joey were busting their butts in what free time they had to make this poor, previously abandoned game better. I love management games, I love porn. Win-win, yes?

So since I've been following all this for so long, I got the urge to help. Now I know I don't have the skillset to code, and my porn tends to stick with games and videos, so I'd have some time trying to make my favorite girls into packs. (Not to mention, Capt seems to have really sewn up that niche. Seriously, that guy has some great stuff as far as real girl packs.) So I decided to play to my personal strengths, and dust off my writing skills. Now, I hadn't written a damn thing in the vein of fiction in ~years~, and I'd never written anything erotic. Still, I had a grand idea to really flesh out the text in the game, most of which is quite short and to the point. And hey, if the guys working on the actual game liked some of my actual ideas about the game itself enough to toss some of them in, which ties into the things I'd write a bit, fun times for all.

I am one crazy, horny motherfucker with a penchant for submission, humiliation, and sex, with a willingness to write ~almost~ anything. And apparently, that's what was needed, because Crazy grabbed my first idea of a puppygirl job and has been furiously coding on it for what, 3 weeks now? And of course, new jobs need new text, so in addition to having a huge list of scenes I want to write on and/or replace with more... memorable scenes, I've been writing away for this puppygirl job.

All this preamble is mostly to fill you in to this point, and let you know that I'm starting this thread to give me a place to post about some things I'm working on, and tell you a bit about what Crazy and Joey might be doing. I'll probably toss out occasional ideas too, and we can discuss new ideas, though this was mostly to be more about things that I'm already working on, or that these fine dudes are already coding in. So if you have an idea for a scene or something like that, share that shit with me, because I might just write it up. I've been taking inspiration from all over, and while I've got 6 pages (Yes, really, 6 pages of single-line ideas to spawn either things to code or ideas for scenes I want to write) of ideas with more coming every day, I want more from you guys! I'm a simple man, I work like a good pot of spaghetti. I throw everything at the wall and see what sticks. I'm doing my best to pull out as many stops as I can, having girls interact with other girls or other people, trying to write scenes for skillchecks, adding scenes with different outcomes based on player disposition, and coming up with other things to play with.


THE LIST (This is simply things that I've currently completed or and working through and have ideas for already in the works. I'll try to update it when I can to give you guys some clue as to what may be getting into the game as far as added text)


Things with full scenes already written

Puppygirl Job Scenes- Currently 30 scenes Written

In Progress (No Particular Order)

Kidnapping Scenes
Different Scenes depending on if a girl is free or slave for most brothel jobs
Free Time Scenes
Legal Status Scenes (Free>Slave>Animal>Other)
Descriptions of Accommodations, based also on slave or free
Gang Scenes, including interactions with girls
Renaming scenes for girls already branded
Branding scenes
Choosing a daughter's fate scenes
Incest Scenes
Free Girl specific scenes
Ponygirl Scenes
Cowgirl Scenes
Pornstar scenes
Matron Scenes
Head Girl Scenes
Feed Poor Scenes
Community Service Scenes


I've got more ideas, but all of these posted have at least a couple first line ideas already written, and I consider them already in the works. (Though some don't even have the code to work yet, like renaming) That's what I'm working on right now. I try to do a scene or so a day, and Crazy said he's nearing a playable version with the puppygirl job. Anytime he or Joey have me working on a specific job because it's getting coded at the time, you can probably expect that one to get the most attention, at the very least till it's first release, but I'm likely to start writing just whatever I happen to think of that day too. It's hard to not write where your head takes you, or to keep writing variations on a scene you need several runs of while keeping them fresh and at least somewhat original and different from each other, so I'll likely take breaks to work on other stuff too.

So that's the gist, folks. Give me ideas whenever they smack you in the face, yeah? I'm here, and I'm writing.

(Note: I'll probably keep the list in this first post updated, but that's about it, so if you tend to check things like that, all you'll need to look at is the list itself)
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Re: Writer's Room
« Reply #1 on: October 07, 2015, 11:33:11 AM »
Really awesome, makes me excited! If I have ideas I'll be sure to share them.  Right now I probably have similar ideals to yours. But soon enough if I get another more original ideal I'll share it! The best part, more text means more replaying and different themes and even more possible jobs.

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« Reply #2 on: October 07, 2015, 11:50:36 AM »
Absolutely! Y'know, I don't read every piece of text for every thing in the game each "weel", but I do like to go through and read some of them, at the very least on the girls that have warnings or notices of some kind. Still, the scenes I'm writing are a bit longer, usually 2-3 decent paragraphs, so you probably shouldn't expect a huge immediate influx of text. It's going to take me a long while to begin to really flesh it all out. I'm looking forward to having more reading material and descriptions though, and random events and the like. Maybe it won't all be new every time, but I'd like to get to a point where there's a significant variety and a decent amount of text that's more than a few lines. I really want the player to enjoy themselves, and to really experience in the head the differences in things happening. I want the slave experience to be vastly different from the free girl's experience, and both vastly different from girls that are legally domestic animals or objects, down to the small details. Even if the player plays a decent guy, the impact should really be felt that if the girl is a slave, she doesn't have any rights, and will be forced to do what her owner decides, because she's property, not a person. Contrast that with the free girls, where I'd like to show that they have the option of their own desires beyond a slave, and can go out on dates, make their own decisions, go shopping, enjoy time with their kids perhaps, go out to eat or to a club, etc. They have the choice to actually say no, or decide not to do something. (Not that you ~have~ to listen, you could be playing a real bastard of a dude) So I'm definitely up for any ideas you have, mate. I can't say I'll hop to them, or even get to them soon even assuming I really like the idea, but if I do, it'll go on my to-do list. (Though some things stay there a bit just because I don't know ~how~ I want to write them) I'll write a scene for aaaaaalmost anything, even a few things that maybe aren't my thing. All I have to be able to really do is relate to it in some way. (Which leaves out a few things like Futa, Gay, Loli, etc. but just because I can't write those doesn't mean someone else can't.)

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« Reply #3 on: October 07, 2015, 12:41:54 PM »
I really like how you plan on writing things out, emotions, growth, depression, freedom, and slavery, it all sounds compelling to read about, can you or a future writer make me feel like shit after raping a girl, will she reconcile or is it doomed will she gain a fear of men will she become a girl in an NTR, fucked so much she just loves sex and starts not caring or starts caring very little? What if taking a girl from her family causing her to eventually meet a family member in brothel and showing what she has become? Can you or another writer make me feel bad?

What will she feels or what will the family member feel. What if some event that the player forced a particular girl make her become unresponsive. What happens when they accept it or enjoy it from the start? One the most amazing things you can do is show the diversity of the girls, or saying that this girl with this trait will have this or this happen. The interesting things to me is what happens when they become corrupted? How do they act?

Finally love, what does it mean that you are her true love? Does she accept other girls, does she try to get you to pay more attention to her? How does her emotions make her think? How does the owner react? I'm personally really excited for everything you contribute and really want to see how a pet slave and puppy girl is shown. Well that and how the psychological traits affect a girl.

Can't wait to see yours and others contribution!

Don't need answers right now, but for whatever you do, I'm excited. Shoot, if need be I could try to write some of the more darker emotion that the girls feel.
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Re: Writer's Room
« Reply #4 on: October 08, 2015, 05:25:57 AM »
if need be I could try to write some of the more darker emotion that the girls feel.
If you want to write some stuff give a go.  Ill added it in.  We always need more writers.

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Re: Writer's Room
« Reply #5 on: October 08, 2015, 02:19:47 PM »
Nice to see someone try and tackle writing for the project.
Haven't had the motivation to work on anything for WM since my last submission of whoring texts, but if you want to have a set of eyes going over your stuff for proofreading, I would like to try helping out. Maybe it even helps me get back into the groove.

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Re: Writer's Room
« Reply #6 on: October 08, 2015, 11:40:17 PM »
Thanks for the kind words.


I kinda gave up on writing scripts for two reasons: 


1) The tools are bad. 
2) There doesn't seem to be enough state kept by the game, such that a script could actually advance a plot/turn into a game with a real ending.

Perhaps with improvements. I'd get back into it.

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Re: Writer's Room
« Reply #7 on: October 09, 2015, 02:37:56 AM »
Thanks for the kind words.


I kinda gave up on writing scripts for two reasons: 


1) The tools are bad. 
2) There doesn't seem to be enough state kept by the game, such that a script could actually advance a plot/turn into a game with a real ending.

Perhaps with improvements. I'd get back into it.


If we have text ready to be given a home, it'd probably lift scripting up the to-do list.


Any chance of seeing an excerpt of you writing style jonwich?

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« Reply #8 on: October 09, 2015, 08:05:45 AM »
Sure, I don't mind posting a few finished scenes. Just a heads up, where it says girlName, it's going to pull the girl's name out and use it, and where it has another title, it will pull another girl from that job. So, for example, if your Head Girl is Sasha Grey (Off the top of my head, since I was reading that Capt is working on her. Freaking great stuff!), and your puppygirl was Alex Tanner, wherever is says girlName in a puppygirl scene, it will instead say Alex Tanner, and where it might say HeadGirl, it's going to read Sasha Grey.



H:You clip a leash to girlName's collar and she barks happily. She knows she's just your pet bitch, and she's happy to be with her master.

Many pet owners act neglectfully of their pets, but not you! GirlName was happy when you led her crawling through the city to your brothel, excited to keep you company while you worked. Upon arrival, however, you hand off girlName's leash to a member of a gang, who leads the confused girl fearfully into the dungeon, unsure of what to expect. GirlName flinched at the cries of pain, but instead of enduring punishment, she is led to a room with five girls, all young, frogtied and placed on their backs. GirlName looked up at the gang member and yipped questioningly, nuzzling his thigh like a good puppy.

“Often your Master gets girls that are virgins,” he explained, stroking girlName's hair, “And this is part of their.... tenderizing process. We won't fuck them for a couple weeks yet at least, after they are branded, but we like to keep them excited. That's your job today.” Not quite gently, the man grabbed her hair and pushed girlName's face into the first girl's cunt. GirlName began to lick in earnest, both happy with her task, and that she was not being punished. Little muffled cries and moans came from the hooded girl as she bucked her hips into the pet's lips and tongue. Clearly the girl had not had release in some time. When the young slave-to-be's nipples were hard as could be and she was on the cusp, the man tugged girlName away, leaving the teen thrashing, unfulfilled.

The process was repeated over the course of a couple hours, the gang member occasionally giving girlName's wagging ass little slaps to motivate her, as if she needed any motivation. As she licked the last girl, she suddenly gasped as he shoved her face in the girl's pussy and pushed himself into hers. As girlName was being fucked, she crawled on top of the virgin teen and pressed her tits into the other girl's, nipples roughly rubbing together as she ground their clits together. GirlName came three times as the man's cock throbbed in her, balls slapping into the teen's virgin pussy. When he was close, he pulled out of her pussy, walked around the side, and jerked his cum onto the teen's budding breasts. “Clean her up, and we'll get you back to your master.” The gang member slapped girlName's ass once, and she began to gingerly lick the jizz from the teen's nipples.


I:HeadGirl clips a leash to girlName's collar. She is happy with her leash being held and content that she's a pet.

GirlName spent a day with HeadGirl, as she often did when her Master was busy. Pets often became disappointed when their owners were neglectful, but HeadGirl always worked hard to keep your pets busy. Sometimes she would play with them, sometimes organize fun activities, sometimes even use them as rewards for the other girls in the house, since your pets were well-loved in the household, for a variety of reasons.

Today girlName spent most of the day as a mischievous puppy, crawling behind HeadGirl, exploring the nooks and crannies of your house, and generally causing playful trouble. HeadGirl was a little exasperated with girlName's small antics, but could hardly fault her for behaving as the little pet you trained her and intended her to be. GirlName was sure not to completely crawl out of line, though, and after a full day of endearing herself to her housemates with her barking, licking, bounding about, hiding of the girls' toys, and playing with their used panties, she found herself contentedly curled up under HeadGirl's desk, too pooped to party.

GirlName cleaned HeadGirl's shoes lovingly with her tongue, making sure not to miss a speck of dirt. When she was done, she curled up between her legs and laid her cheek on HeadGirl's thigh, watching her longingly as she did her paperwork. HeadGirl occasionally pet her hair, and girlName's tongue would hang out of her mouth in a cute pant, whining. “Later,” HeadGirl would say with a smile. GirlName would not accept THAT, but she also wouldn't openly disobey. Very gently, slowly even, she eased her face closer to HeadGirl's panties, moving her skirt up as she went using her nose. It took nearly half an hour before she was nosing HeadGirl's clit through her panties. GirlName would occasionally flick her tongue out at the sweet dampness of the woman's panties, watching her occasionally twitch, her breathing slowly increasing. When HeadGirl still did not say anything, girlName couldn't take it any longer, and pressed her face into the lovely mound, licking and kissing through the fabric, trying to push it out of the way with her nose. HeadGirl finally gave up on her paperwork and leaned back in her chair, enjoying the attention of the Master's little pet. After an hour and several orgasms had passed, HeadGirl finally gripped girlName's hair and pulled her away. “Good girl, now let me work.” Her voice was kind but firm, and girlName knew she was done for the time being. Quietly, and curled up at HeadGirl's feet, resting her cheek on her on of her shoes, waiting for her next instruction.


J: (If you have the Studio) You clip a leash to girlName's collar and she barks happily. She knows she's just your pet bitch, and she's happy to be with her master.

Just another day at the studio, with girlName in tow. She was such a delightful pet, all your porn stars and scene crew loved her visits. Some of the best scenes Director shot were when girlName's leash was handed over and she was led into being an impromptu fluffer, or used as a reward for an excellent scene. Today was different, though. Today, girlName was the star!

GirlName yipped nervously as her makeup was done, pressing her body into the side of your leg. Once her makeup and hair were taken care of, she watched in anticipation as the stage was set up like a kitchen. Suddenly a much louder, booming bark approached. GirlName quivered, pressing against you harder, nuzzling and licking your hand as a large mastiff was brought in, barely under control as it strained against it's trainer's leash. You smile and quiet her, trying to calm her by stroking her hair. “Don't worry, sweetie, he's your co-star. We're shooting a commercial for a major brand of dog food I own shares in.” girlName relaxed a little, but remained pressed against you until you handed her leash off to RandomStageHand.

The commercial was a little difficult to shoot. Your little bitch went through her roll with the grace trained into her, but the mastiff was over-eager, and bits of the scene had to be shot several times. Still, all went well, and Director finally yelled “Cut!” with both girlName and the large dog's faces pressed into their meal. Your bitch looked up, and began to crawl back over to you, but the mastiff had other ideas. GirlName suddenly yelped and began to let out a series of piercing, pleading barks as the mastiff mounted her from behind, and drove it's large red cock into her welcoming cunt. “Should we do something?” someone on stage asked, more out of fascination rather than actual desire. Almost certainly the cameras were still rolling at this point. “No, he deserves his reward.” you reply, smiling as the dog plowed heavily into girlName, and her tits began to sway violent, her tongue panting like a good dog.


K: (High Level/Skill)You clip a leash to girlName's collar and she barks happily. She knows she's just your pet bitch, and she's happy to be with her master.

“Ah, damn, I forgot something.” You curse, and loosely tie the leash to girlName's collar to a tree outside the shop on the edge of town. “Stay, girl.” girlName whined as her Master pet her hair a moment, and walked back inside the shop. She panted a moment, looking after him, and then curled up on the soft grass. There weren't really any people around, but there was still plenty for a puppy to see, hear, and smell. GirlName sniffed the air, enjoying the smell of the flowers, and listening to the birds chatter. A cart drove past, pulled by a few ponygirls, with a coffel of pretty slaves trotting blindly behind it, hooded. GirlName barked excitedly at the moaning girls passing, but once they passed, she curled up again. Master sure was taking a while.

Suddenly girlName noticed something. Her leash, which you had tied so hastily to the small tree, was slack. Indeed, it was laying on the ground, having come undone! GirlName froze, frightened for some reason, contemplating her new situation. Thoughts she'd not had in quite a while began to float through her head, and she trembled, trying to get them to stop. She could speak, she could stand up, she could run away! Nothing was stopping her! Memories of her life before, of friends and family, flowed unbidden through her mind, and she trembled sharply. She began to whine at herself, trying to force the bad thoughts to stop and go away. As the minutes dragged on, the thoughts became more and more insistent, while girlName became more and more afraid and perturbed by them. She forced herself to crawl to the edge of the grass, close to the door, and lay back down, her legs bunched beneath her torso, her tits pressed hard into the ground. It felt like if she could not get as low as possible, she would somehow fall up, off of solid ground. The minutes continued to drag on, and she felt tears forming in her eyes, her heart pounding and feeling like it was breaking.

Abruptly the door open. Master was back! “Hey girl, sorry about that. Did you miss me?” girlName barked loudly and began to whine, crawling with passion to her Master and licking his shoes, pressing herself as close to the ground as she could. “Oh dear, I didn't tie your leash tight enough did I? Did you think I wasn't coming back? There there, girl.” You crouched to one knee and she pressed herself against you, cowering. You pick up the end of her leash and pet her hair, tits and chest until girlName stopped trembling. Standing up, the tension was back on the leash, and the bad thoughts were gone. GirlName was where she was supposed to be. “C'mon girl, let's go home. You deserve a treat, and I think HeadGirl got you some more Bitch Bites. GirlName barked happily.


L:(For when you own more than one)You clip a leash to girlName's collar and she barks happily. She knows she's just your pet bitch, and she's happy to be with her master.

Bitches were an odd mix of competitive and collaborative. GirlName and RandomPuppyGirl were quite happy right now, between your legs, sharing a bone. It was interesting, not to mention pleasurable, to watch their interactions, so much so that you put down the book you were reading. GirlName and RandomPuppyGirl seemed to alternately compete with each other, pushing the other out of the way so that one was forced to the balls instead of having cock down her throat, and then coming together to enjoy your cock with one another. When they weren't fighting to be the one sucking your dick greedily deeper, they would almost shyly kiss each other around the tip, and run their tongues up and down it's length, watching it quiver with delight.

At times they would even go further than sharing, with RandomPuppyGirl nuzzling girlName's neck, kissing and licking her as she sucked on your cock, or vice versa. A couple times you had to give both girls a gentle slap to the cheek or the tit to remind them that they were supposed to be pleasuring you, not just each other. It really was odd that the two seemed both so much at odds, and yet so in sync. You would almost think they were litter-mates, but you knew that wasn't true. Perhaps kennel-mates, but they weren't actually related. Not this pair, anyway. Perhaps being trained and sharing a kennel brought girls together in a way you couldn't really fathom.

You suddenly erupt, spewing cum from the tip of your cock. RandomPuppyGirl had been gently licking up your shaft while girlName had been moving to suck it, and both got a large blast to their faces as they yelped in delight. Gingerly, both girls licked your cock clean before beginning to lick your salty cum from each other's faces, and the drops that hit the floor. You return to your book, satisfied. For a couple moments, the two of them licked your left toes, making small sighs of happiness. Puppies are easily distracted though, and the licking soon turned back on each other. Within minutes they were curled up on their sides at your feet, licking each other's cunts, moaning in pleasure. It did make it hard to read, but the bitches were just doing what they should. You smile at the happy look in girlName's eyes, and turn the page.



Today I'm going to try and knock out a couple more low-skill refusals and a few free time scenes, and if I can, a few of the other scenes I had planned already. (I want to knock out the low-skill and free-times today because that'd probably get it to a point where at least the text was in a mostly playable state). I also just got the delightful news that scenes for a girl's birthday are possible, and so are scenes based on a month, so you guys can bet I'm going to do some scenes for birthdays and some stuff for holidays like Halloween or Christmas.

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« Reply #9 on: October 09, 2015, 09:46:56 AM »
Just scanned over the first scene and there a some problems with your tenses, as in you switch from present to past tense (if I remember the names from the tenses right, has been awhile).

Generally things that appear in turn summary are written as something that has already happened, while scripts tend to be in written as things that happen right now.

You also use contractions in some places (as in "she's"), which I personally dislike unless used in direct speech. Reason for that is that I feel like it clashes with the possessive 's making text a bit harder to read.

There are also a few comma errors (as far as I can tell, I am not particularly great with them).
For example, the one I marked in red in this sentence seems extraneous to me:
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Upon arrival, however, you hand off girlName's leash to a member of a gang, who leads the confused girl fearfully into the dungeon, unsure of what to expect.
This sentence also implies that the gang member is fearful, which is not intended as far as I can tell. A better structure would be "...who leads the confused and now fearful girl into the dungeon,..." although there are probably a dozen other ways to fix this.

While there are probably a few other things I would suggest using google docs or something similar for further proofreading, it is a lot easier than trying to keep up with forum threads. I also have to do some other things today sadly, but in general the ideas looks pretty good.

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« Reply #10 on: October 09, 2015, 10:03:58 AM »
Fair criticisms. I'll probably have the occasional comma error and area where I could have used better sentence structure. I'll work on that. I actually just downloaded Jarta yesterday because I needed a decent, free word processor, and couldn't get the spell check in Open Office to work for some reason. (I also hate Google Docs, but I'm not ruling it out, if you really like proofreading)  I'd actually been wondering if I wanted to rewrite any of the scenes where the player was present, as of last night. It's awkward trying to  fit two perspectives in there, but more awkward when one is the player. I would like to keep things mostly in the present tense though. I can see what you're saying, but I would like this to be more interesting to read, to really involve the characters (and the player at times), and read a little less like a report. I like many of the scenes currently in the game, and many are well written. I'd like my scenes to be written more like a small story though, instead of just recounting something that has happened. That might be a bit ambitious, considering the large volume of scenes I'd like to write, but I'm going to try. It would be great to have a few more writers, so we could get different style scenes as well, and perhaps scenes and ideas that aren't based on my own personal kinks. Different people might delve into areas I might have less interest in, or more difficulty writing, or just into areas I wouldn't have considered going into. I'm hoping when we've fleshed out a few more jobs, scenes, and features, traffic might bring a few more folks that want to work on girlpacks and writing.

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« Reply #11 on: October 09, 2015, 10:19:01 AM »
It would be great to have a few more writers, so we could get different style scenes as well, and perhaps scenes and ideas that aren't based on my own personal kinks.
This more writers is something that would be great.. Cause what might take the writer 2-3 hours to write I can add into the game in like 15 minutes lol.  So more people writing the quicker we can flesh out some of the jobs.

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« Reply #12 on: October 15, 2015, 02:27:28 PM »
Update on the Puppygirl writing, there are now 30 scenes. Current breakdown.

7 Job Refusal/Punishment Scenes
2 Scenes at the Brothel (One in the company of her Master, one in the dungeon licking virgins that are becoming slaves)
1 Small Scene with the Recruiter (It was really a test scene, I want to do a lot more, better ones)
1 Scene with a Bedwarmer/Master
1 Scene at the Vet
1 Scene following the cleaning girl around
2 Scenes that are purely psychological
1 Scene psychological scene getting a gift from Master
1 Scene spending the day with HeadGirl
1 Scene where she shoots a dogfood commercial
1 Scene with another puppy, double-blowjob
2 Scenes training eating, one actual eating posture, one sucking a rubber cock for water to improve low oral skill
3 Scenes for virgins, one evil virginity loss at the Pound, one Master takes virginity, one where she wants it taken but it isn't
3 Scenes that are Free Time oriented to be fired off once she's got at least moderate to high skill at being a puppygirl (More to come for low skill)
1 scene for being almost done with pregnancy
1 Scene running into her dad while out on a walk (Many, many more to come here)

....I'm missing one. I'll find it later I'm sure.

Either way, just an update. I want to do a couple more punishment/job refusal scenes soon, including one with her dad and sister. Currently interested in writing more scenes of her running into people from her former life too, things that are nice and humiliating. I've got at least two scenes planned for her Birthday as well. All subject to change, in that I write where my headspace takes me at the time. It'll all get done, more a question of when, what with RL stuff and a constant influx of inspiration. Any specific ideas out there folks? Getting excited to see this job released so I can start filling in other jobs while I continue to fill this one out.

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« Reply #13 on: October 15, 2015, 10:03:46 PM »
Nice glad to see more results! If I come up with some more ideals I'll let you know, though I currently have an idle of a sort of cult.

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« Reply #14 on: October 16, 2015, 03:43:56 PM »
I've finally decided to stop lurking and enjoying everyone else's labor and get in on this thread. Jonwich and I seem to have a penchant for the same types of jobs, and I would love to join the effort and write some of them. To that end, I'd like to propose a system for these new jobs, that will incorporate a GOOD/NEUTRAL/EVIL system into player brothels. I note that Jonwich is already writing or planning to write a lot of these, so if he's on board with the proposed system below, we could start looking at dividing the labor.

I) Each new brothel is unique, by player selection. Rather than having the same options available in each brothel, the player is prompted upon purchase to decide what kind of service the facility will provide (e.g., will it be a restaurant, a club, a brothel, etc). Ultimately, we could use the various buildings to render the Community Center, the Farm, and the Hospital redundant, as those services could be offered at various new facilities.

Let's use a Restaurant as an example for how this system would work. The player purchases the new brothel and selects Restaurant from the list of options.

II) Each building has a moral alignment, which restricts the classes of jobs that can be performed there. After choosing "Restaurant," for example, now the player selects whether the building will be GOOD, NEUTRAL, or EVIL.
No matter your moral alignment, you will have the same set of core management jobs (MATRON, CLEANING, SECURITY, etc.) available.
GOOD jobs improve the player's moral character and reputation. In a Restaurant, for instance, you would have access to the food kitchen options typically offered in the community center, with the reputation benefits included. You can also run a traditional restaurant, with more restrained patrons, meaning that your waitresses in this atmosphere will practically never be sexually harassed.
NEUTRAL jobs are designed to keep you at that middle point in reputation, and focus on more conventional sex acts (e.g., strip, oral, hand, but not BDSM, beast, or group). A neutral restaurant would look like a Hooter's. Your girls will have more chance of being harassed, the profit is higher, but there are no reputation effects.
EVIL jobs will harm your reputation, but also give you access to some of the jobs that I know a bunch of us are wishing could be added. Waitresses, for example, could double as whores, offering their bodies using the whore mechanic whilst simultaneously offering food under the waitress mechanic. Customer service jobs would now be girls providing free oral service to patrons. They would dramatically improve customer satisfaction, but also cut into the number of patrons using the waitresses for sexual services (why pay when it is free?). EVIL alignment would also, with various upgrades (mechanic to be explained), give you access to jobs like Torture Entertainment, Human Toilet, Human Pet, etc.

III) Each building can be upgraded for a price, and each has a limited available number of upgrades. If you're GOOD, for instance, you could upgrade the restaurant to have a community garden (opens some farm jobs where half of the produce goes to charity, improving your reputation) OR a civic hall (expanding the restaurant to be a venue for large civic meetings and events, with potentially high profit and a smaller improvement to reputation). Not both. Each would offer unique jobs, but if you want to get the other upgrade, you'll have to buy another building and do it separately. This incentivizes players to expand, and gives each facility it's own character. If you want to add individual upgrades that provide a single new job, then perhaps each building can support one major upgrade and two or three minor upgrades.


EXAMPLE: The Restaurant. These jobs are just the ones I can think of, and I'm sure there could be more. We could also have major and minor upgrades, where the major ones are limited to one upgrade, but perhaps you could get two or three minor upgrades, where each minor upgrade adds one unique job. You may note that there are much fewer opportunities here for sex, anal, group, etc. This reflects that this is a restaurant... if you want those options, choose a brothel as your building type. I also think BDSM and Beast should be more difficult to do, and should take some targeted efforts by the player to attain.

RESTAURANT (GOOD)

1. Administrative (the required jobs for any working facility; I'm sure I've forgotten some, but these would not be really changed. I'll only explain new jobs or changes from old jobs).
a. MATRON
b. SECURITY
c. CLEANING
d. CUSTOMER SERVICE
e. ADVERTISING

2. Food services.
a. COOK (about time this got added in a for-profit environment! The COOK checks the cooking skill [surprise] and improves customer satisfaction for the building).
b. WAITRESS (GOOD). This version of waitress will have very few sexual scenarios involved, and will rely heavily on Intelligence and Service scores to be successful.
c. BARTENDER

3. Food pantry. This is a community service wing of the restaurant that improves your reputation.
a. PANTRY COOK. This is the cooking job from the community center.
b. COMMUNITY SERVICE. Same as the community center, but focused on providing food and services to the patrons of your food pantry.

4. UPGRADE: Civic Hall. If you choose this major upgrade, you expand your restaurant to include a banquet hall for meetings and events. I imagine this working kind of like the Movie Studio, with each girl adding her specific skills in her assigned job to the success of the event. The events would happen once every two turns, with the first turn as preparation and the second turn as execution. Your payout would depend on the success of the event, using a formula that smarter people than me may need to build.
a. EVENT PLANNER. This girl uses Intelligence, Service, and Confidence to assist the client in planning the entire event.
b. WAITSTAFF. Same as a waitress, but contributing to the event success.
c. SINGER.
d. ESCORT. The way it's currently written (super tame) seems to fit this kind of moral alignment. One of your girls is the assigned escort of a merchant or alder at the banquet... kind of fits, right?

5. UPGRADE: Community Garden. So you're one of those farm-to-table places now, you hippie. On top of that, half your produce goes to local charities. This upgrade gives you access to parts of the farm job, plus a moral alignment boost! Ideally, your restaurant can be configured to draw from your food production and use these items in the cooking, the way that brewing and bartending currently works.
a. FARMER
b. GARDENER
c. BREWER
d. HERDGIRL
e. BUTCHER

RESTAURANT (NEUTRAL)

1. Administrative. Same as above.

2. Food services.
a. COOK. Same as in GOOD alignment.
b. WAITRESS (Neutral). This is the current waitress, with the higher percentage of sexual encounters.
c. BARTENDER. Same as in GOOD alignment.


3. Stage.
a. SINGER
b. ACCOMPANIMENT
c. ENTERTAINER

4. UPGRADE: Gambling Hall. Player purchases a gambling license and expands until you can accommodate a gambling hall with card tables.
a. CARD DEALER
b. BUNNY WAITRESS. Yeah, about time, right? This is a waitress with a much higher chance of sexual encounters, but it stays relatively softcore (e.g., oral, hand, foot, but not sex or anal). Customer satisfaction much higher, profits much higher, more taxing on the girls, and requires higher oral/hand/foot skills with service skills and attractiveness to be successful. Probably should include some additional bonus language if you actually have the bunny outfits equipped.

5. UPGRADE: Farm plot. Same as with the GOOD alignment, but you keep all of the goods produced and turn it right around into the restaurant.
a. FARMER
b. GARDENER
c. BREWER
d. HERDGIRL
e. BUTCHER


RESTAURANT (EVIL)

1. Administrative. Same in each alignment.


2. Food services.
a. COOK. Still the same, but maybe with some issues revolving around cooking human flesh... there could be an opportunity for that here.
b. WAITRESS (EVIL). This waitress doubles as a whore, for all individual sex but not group, bdsm, or beast. Run both codes; she'll get her income from the waitress part, plus any patrons who decide to hire her for sex. Taxing on the girl, but high profits.
c. BARTENDER. Do we make this evil? How? Do we even bother?


3. Sex services.
a. ORAL SERVICE. This is a customer service girl who only provides oral service to patrons. The blowjob is like free chips and salsa. Increases customer satisfaction dramatically, but cuts into the number of customers who take advantage of the waitress sex jobs. Your profit comes solely from tips.
b. HUMAN FURNITURE. The girl can function as a living plate, or perhaps the chair or table for patrons. I think I saw jonwich and Baal both playing with some options for this job.
c. HUMAN TOILET. Again, I think some of you are already working on something like this.
d. SLAVE ADVERTISING. Combines advertising with Street Whore.


4. UPGRADE: Torture Stage. Eat and drink while watching the girls do the more extreme entertainments.
a. ROUGH ENTERTAINMENT. Like a singer, except the girl is on stage for group, BDSM, or beast. Checks those skills and attractiveness for success. Wouldn't mind pairing this with some new traits, like vaginal and/or anal tightness, because there are only so many horse cocks a girl can take without doing something to her holes.
b. PAIN GIRL. Torture--not BDSM, but torture--for profit. All the negative impacts, but now with a paying audience. And should the girl die under torture, an evil restaurant should be able to butcher the body for the more... discerning... palates among the patrons.
c. PUBLIC USE GIRL. A girl is placed in the stocks and is available to all patrons for cheap. Many more customers, lower profit per head, lower impact for poor skills... not like she has to do much to impress the customers.


5. UPGRADE: Slave Farm. Increased output for regular crops, more taxing on the girls, and access to some of the unique options.
a. FARMER. More output, more tiredness.
b. GARDNER. More output, more tiredness.
c. BREWER. More output, more tiredness.
d. ANIMAL BREEDING. With the girls. I believe the farm is already working on this job.
e. MILK. Let's get those lactation skills into play!
f. All the appropriate petgirl jobs that relate to food.


So, this is my proposed system. I know there are a lot of new jobs to write, but having this system in place provides a context for those jobs, and might help us in dividing them all up between the various writers offering our services.

Thoughts? Good, bad, terrible, dear God no? And, of course, I'd be happy to write a lot of the jobs to make this work.
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