Added elements descriptions to the SF. Neutral is missing, "Air" you named "Wind" for some reason and Darkness/Light have the same descriptions. Also tooptip auto-expands (looks a bit odd) on descriptions this long so I can either use smaller fontsize or the existing descriptions need to be shrunk
Will rewrite. How many lines MAX? So it would look good? Or how many signs?
Neutral – didn’t touch that at all. Going to create.
The Air/Wind - ok that probably came from the: “fire>wind>lightning>earth>water>fire”, will change Wind to Air when rewriting.
Light and Darkness have one description because there are tight together. One can’t exist without the other. If you want, I will make separate descriptions for them.
Yeah, I prolly should have said "in locations", not "on map". Maybe even in the actions (some) or on pictures like we do with shops whenever possible.
On location is sounding OK for me. I don’t know how we stand with the slums facilities concept, but I wanted to propose those:
Brothel – own by competition, MC can recruit hookers here.
gambling den – maybe add some poker or something to the game?
drug dealer -
pawn shop – selling shit other shops won’t buy, and buying here some shit other shops don’t sell (but with the sex items you probably were thinking about adding a sex shop or something like that?)
loan shark – MC can take a loan for a period of time. After failing to pay up or killing the loan shark, game over.
We need more maps. We won't be able to show everything at one map. Four maps, four quarter, I guess.
Current map goes to scrap? I thought that the map had potential. The castle on the hill in the middle could be the guards HQ, slums could be added in the area under the arena and above the tavern. The rich folk would be in the high right corner where the palace is.
And to clarify one thing; PyTFall is one giant city and MAYOR part of the empire/kingdom/union or more a medium/small size city being a part of something or a City-state with its own rules?
ALSO, adding some of the new back stories for the MC, outsider, comming to PyTFall to turn things around:
Weapon broker I know two things about weapon and armor. How good they are and how much I can get for them. I was a weapon smuggler, profiting from the law that banned providing the empire technologies to less developed communities and its enemies. Selling harder armor and shields that would withstand enemies weaponry to one side and selling to the other side, weapons that would pierce thru enemy armor. With discovering new lands and internal conflicts between natives, selling my goods was a really profitable business. Unfortunately I lost my cautiousness around my business partner. That bitch reported me to the authorities. Luckily there still was a high ranked man inside the guards that was on my side. Pulling every favor and bribing my way out, I managed to flee the city unharmed, but only with fraction of my fortune. The worst part was that I didn’t predict betrayal from this side. My own, fucking wife turned me out.
Retired soldierOnce I was know under a different name. I was a soldier in service for a minor noble. Being one of the best, I was pretty confident in getting the captain rank quite quickly. But I got robbed from my promotion in favor of the nobles nephew. Under new commanding officer, my squad got the assignment of escorting a cart with payment for soldiers in another outposts. Not half a day from our starting point, in the woods we got ambushed by a bandit raid. It was a bloody mess. The outcome was quite gruesome. We manage to slaughter all of them but the losses were huge. Under the poor commandment, only three men survived. The nobles nephew that was in command, his bodyguard and me. Looking at face of my killed brothers I approached the commander. One swift cut and the bodyguards head had hit the ground before his body did. Stunned and paralyzed with fear that stinking brat just stood there. The expression on his face when I stabbed him was priceless. This situation gave me an idea. I switched my uniform with the least blood stained clothes of a killed bandit. Afterwards I smashed his head so no one could recognize the face. Carrying the payroll casket under my arm I vanished without trace.
Other stories in progress:
- Scholar with small budget for his experiment
- Kicked out mage
- Sex toy inventor
- Treasure hunter
- Cast away
- Previous gang member
- Breath mint smuggler
- Escaped from abusing family
- Kicked out of town
I’m open for any other suggestions about the MC past.